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Subject: 0.999 editorial comments
Line Comment 93, etc. Change the many occurrences of two spaces, e.g. in 'else "notify"', to a single space. 105 Add a comma after "side" 107 Change "quality of service" to either "quality-of-service" or "QoS". The present text reads like it's about the quality of the "service contracts". 118 Change "and and" to "and". 119 Change "Message resending" to "message resending". 135, 138 Add a space after "Table". 135 Remove "Cardinality =". 135 Change "And type" to "The type". 138 Some of the namespace URIs end with '/' and some don't. Is there any value in being consistent? 140 Add a new paragraph stating that XPaths are used in titles and other places in Section 4. Also add a reference to XPath 1.0 in Section 8. 165 Change "will be" to "is". 176 Change "receiving RMP" to "Receiving RMP". 185, 188 Change "producer party" to "Producer" "Party" was used without explanation in Section 1.2 for the combination of the Producer and the Sending RMP. It should not be used again for something different. 185 Change "sending RMP" to "Sending RMP". 186, 190 Be consistent about whether the parallel sentences are one sentence or two and about whether the sentences finish inside or outside the parentheses. 192 Remove the comma after "header". 192 Change "identifies reliable messages" to "identifies a reliable message". 204 Change "message which encountered" to "message that encountered". 227 Change "E.g., Sending RMP" to "E.g., the Sending RMP". 228 Change "sent with Callback" to "sent using the Callback". 229 The definition of "Reply Publishing" uses none of the previously-defined terminology. For example, "error or acknowledgment" isn't consistent with other terminology. 239 Put the definition for "Intermediary" in the terminology section since it also appears in Section 1.2. 277 Change "response to this request" to "response to this second request". 288 Change "sequence number which is an integer, and which is unique within a group" to "sequence number, which is an integer that is unique within a group". 291 Change "althouh allowed" to "although it is allowed". 294 Change "a sequence number" to "a unique sequence number". 300 Change "A Reliability agreement for messaging" to "An agreement for messaging reliability". 300 Change the hyphens to en-dash (0x2013 in the StarOffice "Special Character" dialog box). 303 Change "protocol features, including details about choreography between sending and receiving RMPs, and timing parameters" to "protocol features, including timing parameters and details about choreography between sending and receiving RMPs". It currently sounds like "timing parameters" is a third level. 311 Change the first sentence to "Table 3 shows the Agreement Items that this specification uses." Regards, Tony Graham ------------------------------------------------------------------------ Web Products, Technologies and Standards Phone: +353 1 8199708 Sun Microsystems x(70)19708 East Point Business Park, Dublin 3, Ireland
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